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    dots Submission Name: Loving Youdots
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    Author: black_beauty18
    ASL Info:    25/Female/Hutchinson, KS
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 153/146/46
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 722
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Yet another love poem... I'm completely head over heels, but scared at the same time... Just let me know what you guys think!


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    dotsLoving Youdots
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    Baby, I know that I seem wary,
    But please don't get me wrong.
    To feel like this is scary,
    I've been hurt for so long.

    It's plain to see you're not the same,
    As all the other guys.
    No empty words, no playing games,
    No pain, no tears, no lies.

    It's funny that I still have hope,
    That one day I'll find love.
    But you give me the strength to cope,
    I think that you're the one.

    So baby, please, give me time,
    To push through all my fears.
    I already know your love is mine,
    Smiles have replaced my tears.

    Now I know true love is real,
    It just took a while to find.
    Joy and security are what I feel,
    No longer a heart confined.




    Submitted on 2007-09-07 17:32:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was such a good poem, I loved it! a FAV! Its so pure, give in to love, don't hessitate, u might be surprised!
    If you want I wrote a few poems similar (Night and Day, Future Teller and Thank you)
    XOXO
    | Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by rachel gless | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with everyone else this is an exceptional write I think this deserves and award. The way you show such emotion and the want of you wanting to love some one but want to make sure that they are the one is simply brillant. You are and excellent poet and keep on writing the way you do.
    | Posted on 2007-11-24 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write!! I like how you put together the way that you want to love this person and think that they are the one, and showing that time to put away your fears is something that all of us have to do.

    True love will always come back to you no matter what.
    poet09
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very sweet...

    Man, love can make you crazy! But, there is nothing quite like a new love...when you're terrified, but you have hopes for the best.

    I think you captured it well.
    | Posted on 2007-09-08 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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