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    dots Submission Name: Love or Stupidity?dots
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    Author: black_beauty18
    ASL Info:    25/Female/Hutchinson, KS
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 153/146/46
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 654
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    Description:
       I wrote this a while ago before I broke up with my ex boyfriend... And before I met the man who inspired me to write "Falling" and "Loving You". Tell me what you think.


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    dotsLove or Stupidity?dots
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    Why does my world collapse when we're apart?
    How can I want you through all the pain?
    I can't help but continue to give you my heart,
    In hopes that one day you'll change.
    But that day will never come, so why do I even try?
    Like a fool, I continue to love you.
    Each word from your mouth is just another lie,
    My heart is seeing what my brain already knew.
    And so I'm stupid, for I can't let you go,
    You'll leave with a piece of me.
    Love or stupidity? I guess I'll never know,
    But of this pain I'll never be free.




    Submitted on 2007-09-07 20:47:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I do not want to sound kinda of rude or something like that, i but while reading this, i felt thta it was just so simple, use more imagination, some symbolysm will increase reader's attention to your writings... but i guess the idea was ok, i didnt like the word stupidity, i dont know why... so i hope you can improve it.. and well if you have time please take a look to my writing i would be glad to read your comments about them..
    take care
    have a nice day
    and peace and love
    Victor
    | Posted on 2007-09-08 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]


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