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    dots Submission Name: A child minddots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 355
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       When you are a child life is filled with hope and wonder and sparkly stars and nothing matters, until you get older the world changes you...into what you are today...but what do you become and why is the question isn't it?


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    dotsA child minddots
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    glimmer twinkle sparkle
    a child full of hunger
    "she's beautiful,
    so cute,how old is she?"

    love me love me
    hug me hold me
    grasp my hand
    go outside and twirl me

    don't blink sweet baby
    don't close those precious eyes
    for everything thing you see today
    is just tomorrow's ugly demise

    bashing plastic and a watch
    slithers away
    and time is broken
    in her precious mind

    "I'm going to steal you,
    my beautiful baby, you'll be mine forever..."
    tick tock tick tock
    don't look in the mirror
    never see what time
    has stopped

    runnning screaming
    tears of joy
    2....laugh and giggle
    ...7.....make friends forever
    ...14....
    don't look in the mirror

    "Oh dear, what happened...
    Is that you baby girl?
    Where did those pretty eyes and curls go?
    Oh no...."
    screetching far leaving
    a cloud of dust
    What's wrong with me
    What did i do wrong
    Was is all those words i let fall
    from my mouth
    or the food i let in

    2....laugh and giggle
    ....7...make new friends...
    14...losing buddies
    depression sets in
    roll up
    lick it
    seal it
    now toke it
    forget that you had problems

    "How's that sweet baby girl doing?"
    .....
    "What a shame....
    she could have been so much better"

    I only wanted:
    love me love me
    hug me hold me
    it only lasts so long until we all
    get older
    grow quiter
    until we laugh
    giggle
    talk
    now cry....
    we find this sixteen year old girl
    now cutting...popping pills
    wishing to die

    if only they loved her...held her...
    because deep down she'll always be that
    sweet
    precious
    cute baby girl
    she hasn't changed
    no
    only the world...




    Submitted on 2007-09-07 23:23:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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