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    dots Submission Name: Unforgivable sindots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 281
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsUnforgivable sindots
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    My head pounds from deep within
    Sweet temtations unforgivable sin
    The sweet aroma of your skin,
    Tearing flesh
    And your screams
    Its music to my ears
    Biting you i see your tears
    Choking you I know your fears,
    You bleed from all my cutting
    I get aroused when i start gutting
    Crushed ribs from head butting,
    I see your blood and it arouses me
    Trickling tears its just how i planned it to be
    Don't worry not long til its over soon you'll be free,
    But for now your my toy
    For now your my play thing
    Lets see how many screams you bring
    Because sreams are like a song; lets hear you sing,
    Oh my little tourture kitten
    Let me examine where i've bitten,
    Tisk tisk don't piss me off
    I'll cut you where it hurts where its soft,
    Funs over time to die
    I'll miss your sweet tasting blood i can't lie
    It'll be over in a snap so don't cry,
    Your screams were a pleasure
    And your flesh was a treat
    Maybe once again in death we'll meet,
    But its time to go
    Sorry you can't stay but no,
    So as i promised it will be done
    With a snap and a crack
    Its over thats that,
    Should i dump you in the road
    Or shall i have more fun at home as i
    Hang you on a mural
    Piss on your grave at your funeral
    Knowing i can kiss your rotting mouth at home?




    Submitted on 2007-09-07 23:52:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW
    This is an Amazing write that almost scares the Hellout of me
    Being that I amnot a Serial Killer or anything like that I dont know how correct this is but I have got to tell you it was correct enough to scare the heck out of me
    May I ask where the idea for this write came from
    I am extremely curious
    Very Powerful and Moving write
    God Bless
    Ron

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    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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