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    dots Submission Name: Dead lover's doomdots

    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Gothic
    Total Views: 953
    Average Vote:    2.5000
    Bytes: 1007

       A rather satanic start, moving ontoa new genre, ignore depressiveness of others, concentrate on what's happening now.

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    dotsDead lover's doomdots

    Hiding in shadows
    To watch her crawl,
    In satan's flames
    She will be no more.
    Crawling in shadows
    And fighting the flames
    Noone resists
    The immense hell's pain.

    Watch us in hell, now
    Watch us all crawl,
    Fighting no more
    To give up our souls.
    Hide in the shadows
    Where dark flowers bloom
    Knowing too much to care
    In dead lover's doom

    Watching and waiting
    So you come to my arms,
    Cursing and spiting
    To paths that you cross.
    Drowning in sorrows
    And hoping for hearts
    To see you,
    Nailed to a wall.

    -chorus- X2

    -vocal rest-

    Keep us from waiting
    And shield us from doom
    Much in you life
    Has been worth living for,
    Creeping from shadows
    And into the light,
    Hopeless remains
    Only death that's in sight.

    Submitted on 2007-09-08 17:34:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mmm interesting. i like the wording it seems to flow nicely. i'm glad to see you posting something i thought there for a while you got lost and couldn't find your way back to Elite it was very depressing point in my life... (thinking you were lost) hehe nice write over all. took bad i can't hear it being sang by your band

    | Posted on 2007-09-19 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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