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    dots Submission Name: Happy Birthday momdots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 55
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       I'm trying to think up something to put on a birthday card for my mom. I haven't been able to come up with anything better. Anyone have any ideas.


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    dotsHappy Birthday momdots
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    You've always been there,
    to show me the light.
    You've saved me from,
    the childish frights.

    You showed me the sun,
    in the darkest of times.
    I love you so much,
    so I made you this rhyme.

    I know that it's tachy,
    I just wanted to say,
    You're my favorite mother,
    Happy Birthday.




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      whoever your mum is, she is exetremely lucky
    | Posted on 2007-12-06 00:00:00 | by Tabris | [ Reply to This ]
      This surely was a very cute and heartfelt piece of poetry for your mother
    ....I am sure she loved this, her 'birthday present' .....

    It is quite short...and sweet and the meter is good too, all these are good points in writing poetry. Nice that you thought of writing this for your mother's birthday.

    The line I like the most is -

    "You're my favorite mother"

    ....thats quite typical of a child while complimenting his or her mother. This made the poem all the better.

    Keep writing. : )
    | Posted on 2007-12-05 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      I thinkthis is a really Sweet poem where you show your Momn just how much Her Love truly means to you
    My Mother is and always will be my Best Friend in the World
    I can tell you and your Mom have almost that sale relationship
    I also Hope she has the Best Birthday Ever
    I will be Praying for you both
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-11-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      "I know that it's tacky"

    Aren't special occasion poems usually tacky anyways? Don't sweat it.

    Mothers, what would we do without them? There is no way that we can ever pay them back for the great things they do for us. And yet we always think we've payed it off with rhymes...how foolish are the children of the world...only when a girl herself becomes a mother will she realize that she can never receive as much in return.

    It's nice to see that you are thinking of your Mom. Lovely to see that.
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      Allo

    I think it's a really sweet poem Any mother would love a rhyme like that on her birthday card

    -Sere
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by Lil Sere | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, I think it is just fine...any Mom worth her salt will love it and love you.... bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think there is anything tacky about this poem. What a great tribute to your mom. Most people don't take the time. Good to see that you do. Good poem. Sweet : )
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by A Silver Key | [ Reply to This ]
      i think its cute, she'll love it (however on cards to my mum i like to add in something about chores.. like.. whyy, exactly, i skirted them..)

    <3 stay well
    | Posted on 2007-09-09 00:00:00 | by uncertainty | [ Reply to This ]


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