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always the best friend and never the girlfriend


Author: black rose13
ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137 /97 /39
Words: 180
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
Total Views: 1215
Average Vote:    3.0000
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this is just how ive been feeling for a while now. and i just had to get it out.


always the best friend and never the girlfriend



What do I have to do to make you proud?
Just to try to get your attention I scream aloud.
But all the screaming I do doesnt seem to make you move.

What can i do to impress you?
I sing my heart out.
But all the you do is scream and shout.

All these questions run through my head.
Like a nightmare never ending.
Are you really that blind to see that something perfect has been staring right at you?

What do you see in her?
She's a whore and nothing more.
But then again i guess thats what you go for.

How can you fall for her?
All she ever did was use you and break your heart.
But i know I'll always be the best friend and never the girlfriend.

All these questions run through my mind.
Like a nightmare never ending.
Are you really that blind to see that something perfect has been staring right at you.
But I know I'll always be the best friend and never the girlfriend.




Submitted on 2007-09-09 08:13:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i dont get 'him' at all

he acts like he likes you he just wont admit it ohhh myy goodness



i still love you and dont forget what i said

u can convert ahahahaha

ily
| Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by truthbetold | [ Reply to This ]
  Yes nice poem, I know what you mean! Maybe edit the 6th line. I think you could have went deeper into the situation, if you know what I mean. But I think it is still very good. I enjoyed it alot.
| Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by DeVille_85 | [ Reply to This ]
   Good piece but very general. Girl likes guy/guy likes girl but its never noticed. I would have poured more detail into it. But all in all a good poem.
| Posted on 2007-09-09 00:00:00 | by Hazy skies | [ Reply to This ]


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