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    dots Submission Name: always the best friend and never the girlfrienddots

    Author: black rose13
    ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
    Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137/97/39
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 717
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1052

       this is just how ive been feeling for a while now. and i just had to get it out.

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    dotsalways the best friend and never the girlfrienddots

    What do I have to do to make you proud?
    Just to try to get your attention I scream aloud.
    But all the screaming I do doesnt seem to make you move.

    What can i do to impress you?
    I sing my heart out.
    But all the you do is scream and shout.

    All these questions run through my head.
    Like a nightmare never ending.
    Are you really that blind to see that something perfect has been staring right at you?

    What do you see in her?
    She's a whore and nothing more.
    But then again i guess thats what you go for.

    How can you fall for her?
    All she ever did was use you and break your heart.
    But i know I'll always be the best friend and never the girlfriend.

    All these questions run through my mind.
    Like a nightmare never ending.
    Are you really that blind to see that something perfect has been staring right at you.
    But I know I'll always be the best friend and never the girlfriend.

    Submitted on 2007-09-09 08:13:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i dont get 'him' at all

    he acts like he likes you he just wont admit it ohhh myy goodness

    i still love you and dont forget what i said

    u can convert ahahahaha

    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by truthbetold | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes nice poem, I know what you mean! Maybe edit the 6th line. I think you could have went deeper into the situation, if you know what I mean. But I think it is still very good. I enjoyed it alot.
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by DeVille_85 | [ Reply to This ]
       Good piece but very general. Girl likes guy/guy likes girl but its never noticed. I would have poured more detail into it. But all in all a good poem.
    | Posted on 2007-09-09 00:00:00 | by Hazy skies | [ Reply to This ]

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