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    dots Submission Name: Perfection.dots
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    Author: FarFromSanityy
    ASL Info:    15/F/look behind youuu.
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 52/76/34
    Words: 274
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 691
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1970



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    dotsPerfection.dots
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    She envies the girls with all the shallow labels
    Unconfidence is what she's built around
    She has a seraphic face under all that black
    Twenty minutes behind the bathroom mirror
    But still, it's never enough
    No, it's never enough...

    They're all glistening on the covers of old magazines
    While she thumbs through the pages torn
    Of something she wishes she could be
    And all the while, she's crying over their fake smiles
    This world expects perfection
    (no ones got perfection)
    Something no ones got

    When the sticks all used up, she can't leave
    Not until she's somewhat decent
    Not until she's caked
    Hiding in the bathroom with the door sealed shut
    While everyone else is out
    Because no one wants to dance with hideousness

    They're all glistening on the covers of old magazines
    While she thumbs through the pages torn
    Of something she wishes she could be
    And all the while, she's crying over their fake smiles
    This world expects perfection
    (no ones got perfection)
    Something no ones got

    Break the image staring back at me
    Break it so no one else can see
    Bleeding hands, broken glass
    Cause this world expects perfection
    (perfection, perfection, no ones got perfection)
    Something no one in this world has...
    (perfection, perfection, no ones got perfection)
    No one has perfection...
    It's something this world will never see...

    They're all glistening on the covers of old magazines
    While she thumbs through the pages torn
    Of something she wishes she could be
    And all the while, she's crying over their fake smiles
    This world expects perfection
    (no ones got perfection)
    Something no ones got




    Submitted on 2007-09-09 18:22:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i could somewhat relate to that, i liked it and it's truth. i'd like to hear it put to music. good job
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by canarddoue | [ Reply to This ]
      the english vocab/grammar nazi in me is making me do this. *confidence. k now to other things.
    nikkiiii, this piece definitely relates to me. it feels like i could have written this myself a year or so ago. vanity can be a good thing sometimes, but when you get it in excess, it can be damaging. there was a point in my life where i spent about and hour and a half to two hours, daily, in the bathroom, doing just what this song is describing & more. vanity can become your worst enemy...and i don't want what happened to me to happen to you. it feels like i'm seeing my life playing out in yours, sometimes...it is a difficult thing to deal with. but i want you to promise me this, because when i was going through all this, this is what began helping me (of course i still deal with this problem, but it has become not as strong of a problem). just look in the mirror..and even if you don't mean it..tell yourself you're pretty. you're cute. you feel attractive today, you feel a little sexy. anything, whatever. over time you'll start just letting it slip out, and you'll look in the mirror with more confidence. of course, it's not the miracle cure, but it has helped.. you're a beautiful girl nikki, and you should become proud of that. :]
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by DontxSurrender | [ Reply to This ]
      i would love to hear this with music one day, becaus ei think the lyrics are very good and so true. very emotional, and well put
    | Posted on 2007-09-09 00:00:00 | by samyalone | [ Reply to This ]
      very deep with lots of emotion. Could have done without parentheses but good flow. All in all a good read.
    | Posted on 2007-09-09 00:00:00 | by Hazy skies | [ Reply to This ]


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