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    dots Submission Name: Those words were never truedots

    Author: kingsley
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 100/59/46
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       the role of parents in the formation of a child can never be over-emphasied but have we exploited this in a positive way? tell me your veiws

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    dotsThose words were never truedots

    The youth today have affiliated themselves with the evil.
    Their behaviour has increased the army of the devil,
    they have gone from bad to worse ;
    creating more injuries ,deepening old sores.

    As children,they were only told stories.
    As young people, they had no teachers.
    As adults they acted strickly on instinct.
    Seeing the outcome, who did we praise?

    I saw , those words were never true
    because in my eyes the sky has never been so blue.
    A child is taught so that he can teach;
    if he can't blame all who saw him grow

    Submitted on 2007-09-10 12:43:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Seems more like thoughts being outright spoken in my opinion. I feel like you did get the point across and that is a great positive, but you can do much better as far as describing these great, passionate thoughts in a more uplifting and creative way. Continue to write and I will keep up with your work. Try not to take what I said as an offense, because if I thought you weren't a capable writer I wouldn't bother to comment at all in any way, shape or form.
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      we live by instinct because the world today will only allow it. you think we have no rules because we dont live by yours but we do set boundries for ourself known to us as standards that we follow. life is a game and the only way to win is to live. and for those who want to die, they have not yet lost because they are still living. but the devil has no authority in our lives. we do not create his army but work together to create our own. we are the next generation ready to fight for our place and our recognition. fighting for our time to shine andstiving for the acknowledgement and approval of our seniors. we do learn and we do teach. we will make it no matter who said we cant and if they dont think were doing it right, fu<k em

    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]

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