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    dots Submission Name: The Wizard's Martdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Wizard's Martdots
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    He conjured me a girl who was apart
    From other females known to living men,
    With moondust and lost spells and some cayenne,
    And placed a stone where should have been her heart.
    Now all her seeming artlessness was art,
    Her loveliness far past all human ken.
    I gave to her the name of Madelaine,
    A thing Id purchased from a wizards mart.

    I kept her in my castle to conceal
    This wicked thing Id done beyond the law:
    Id bought a woman beautiful, ideal
    Whose soul was ice no flaming Sun might thaw.
    Though I am grey and old I yet believe
    No spells are spun like those that she can weave!





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    I must say that the idea of a wizards mart is humorous. Come and buy some soulless maidens and some disappearing powder for a special discount! :) I really liked these lines:
    "And placed a stone where should have been her heart.
    Now all her seeming artlessness was art"
    They somehow fit perfectly flawless. Exceptionally well done.

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    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      this is artfully done by a true master, you have quite a way with words....delightful....

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      I can say that it is original, and if you feel that the idea is completed don't worry about what others say, but never limit yourself and your talent. All of us whether amateur or professional can always push ourselves beyond our capabilities. We are really only in competition with ourselves, to continue to challenge our perceived boundaries.
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      nicely done but it didn't seem to be finshed
    polish it a little bit more
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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