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    dots Submission Name: Intellectual Hungerdots
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    Author: 7makaveli
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 36/42/45
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsIntellectual Hungerdots
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    Creative juices are flowing,
    The all-knowing eye is glowing,
    Showing me signs and visions of things golden,
    I refuse to recycle things I've told them,
    Perfection is a race in which we are all misplaced,
    Scared to finish, we just wanna keep pace,
    I'll accept the disgrace and humiliation,
    If I come in last place I'll still expect an ovation,
    My mind is heavier than my binder,
    It serves as a reminder that I must find "her",
    and tell her that I love her and find her irresistible,
    I'll read her like a crystal, always tell her I missed her,
    Pursuit of happiness is a race against time,
    Just like perfection, the endless rope we climb,
    In a weeks time I'll be fasting, almost divine,
    The sun's gaze watching over my mind telling it to release all the urges of food and wine,
    It's not just the appetite, the sex and lust is another fight, it's morally impolite but I'm better for it,
    I'll admit that I'm not ready for it,
    But I question is my adrenaline enough?
    Through anticipation does the going really get rough?
    Is my mind a weapon or a liability?
    The ability to tell lies in my minds abilities,
    This is the paradox we call reality,
    The reality check is in need during this month,
    It is the only way to get to the forefront,
    of the problem of humanity's inhuman capacity,
    to accept tragedy and move on emphatically,
    It is a practice in practicality,
    To take away necessities haphazardly,
    And reflect on the sharpness of the daggers we,
    put in each others back unknowingly,
    They can go without food? so can we,
    Cause in reality we are all intellectually hungry.




    Submitted on 2007-09-10 20:38:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you have serious flow, and you MAKE SENSE. Seriously this is creative genius, I do n't think the concepts were at all "forced" to the reader, It was upfront. I loved how you portrayed the clichés that people repeat. Being perfect, finding 'the one',sex, happiness, ect.


    we're always wanting more.


    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Halston | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...heavy stuff here...

    "It's not just the appetite, the sex and lust is another fight, it's morally impolite but I'm better for it,
    I'll admit that I'm not ready for it,"

    I like this part a lot...

    "They can go without food? so can we,
    Cause in reality we are all intellectually hungry."

    And this in particular...I agree...I think we're all starving for intellect.

    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude, I really wanted to like this one but it was heavily forced right from the beginning and the more forced it got the harder it was to read and enjoy. Not your best effort I'm afraid.
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      No, "hunger" implies that one is conscious of the lack of (let's say here) someTHING important for his further vital functions. But, most people seem to have in this case (intellectual, epistemic 'hunger') an "interoceptive anesthesia" - Some... Many... prefer "bliss" over "power". :)
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by -Lith-Ium- | [ Reply to This ]


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