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    dots Submission Name: Infectousdots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 889
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    Bytes: 1383



    Description:
       I was just sad....so this is me in my own little world..be wary.


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    dotsInfectousdots
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    why can't i find a world that's fit for me
    escape from this world caught up with misery

    who ever thought i'd be here today
    to tell you the story of my life
    who ever thought that i'd come this way
    who ever thought that i could turn gray
    i stand falter and die

    i'm so damn depressed as i smile anyway
    don't open this golden box
    or your soul will slip away

    under silver skies they tell me that i should die
    when i just wanted to cry

    infectous black moon
    lace my bed with worms
    infectous black moon
    let them enter my skin
    infectous black moon
    rape my soul again

    A rip in my fleshy coat
    stains my skin again
    tie my neck with rope
    the sky has turned to black
    infectous black moon
    rape my soul again

    embrace me erase me
    am i real any more
    color me purple blue and red
    make me wish that i was dead
    rape my soul again

    infectous black moon
    lace my bed with worms infectous black moon
    let them enter my skin
    infectous black moon
    rape my soul again
    come one rape my soul again

    who ever thought i'd be here today
    to tell you the story of my life




    Submitted on 2007-09-10 21:21:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is an extremely sad write where you describe a Life filled with depression flawlessly
    The only criticism I would give about this write is the flow is off a little and it just dosent seem to flow write
    The sentiment and the emotion enclosed in the write is perfect and one can easily feel your pain
    Excellent Job with explaining just how crippling depression can be!!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
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    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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