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    dots Submission Name: Land of the Livingdots
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    Author: skinnard
    ASL Info:    22 male New York
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 38/76/49
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLand of the Livingdots
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    I wander through unfamiliar grounds
    Searching for what can not be found
    My skin is rotting, my soul is slipping
    My visions blurry, my brain is missing
    The rain is pouring, doors are locked
    But I wonít get in, even after it stops
    The stares grow weary and the threats grow old
    They wonít give up until their story is told
    The rain stops and the people surround
    I struggle to push through the crowds
    Iím not of their kind, Iím lost to their cause
    Stumbling slowly, with each step I pause
    I do not belong, this is a given
    Iím lost half-dead in the land of the living




    Submitted on 2007-09-11 06:22:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like it. I know what thats like. to be in a crowd and be the only one of a kind. Good write.
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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