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    dots Submission Name: It's a liedots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 886
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1326



    Description:
       this is about lost love and it's kinda bland in structure so you don't have to point that out...but it's about loving someone who pretends to love you but don't really


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    dotsIt's a liedots
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    who said we can't last forever
    who said we were meant to fall apart
    a tear drop stains my shirt you didn't know it
    from your mouth fell those words of hurt

    and i can't believe that your eyes are cloudy
    i can't believe that sound has fallen
    i don't believe that you even thought that
    even to make believe that
    i was all you wanted
    it's a lie

    i was comptemplating the other day and
    i couldn't find the words to say that
    even though you don't embrace
    i still love you

    and i can't believe that your eyes are cloudy
    i can't believe that sound has fallen
    i don't believe that you even thought that
    even to make believe that
    i was all you wanted
    it's a lie

    what did i do wrong i will
    try and compensate and make up
    you said once that you loved me
    but you act as though
    you don't want me
    what did i do wrong

    and i can't believe that your eyes are cloudy
    i can't believe that sound has fallen
    i don't believe that you even thought that
    even to make believe
    that i was all you wanted
    it's a lie




    Submitted on 2007-09-11 13:32:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very pretty...

    A great job of describing how it feels when love goes wrong and forever ends...

    I just wonder about the cloudy eyes...

    Drugs, death, or just a lack of caring?
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, i like it. the way you created this lyrics, i would prefer it to be more symbolic, and you use some symbols, thought, which made me like it a lot... please keep writing, i would like to read more from you soon, and welcome to Elite Skills, a good place to learn writing... and if you have time please take a look to my writings, take care
    peace and love
    and have a nice day!
    Victor
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]


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