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    dots Submission Name: I Can See Youdots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 553
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 946

       Listening to James Blunt last night...

    And thinking about how damn insightful I can be...

    And this came.

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    dotsI Can See Youdots

    I want you to know that I can see you
    See past all the fears and the doubts
    Pull aside the shadow of despair
    And I think I see what it's all about

    I want you to know that I understand you
    I think I know why you do all the things you do
    I just want you to know that you're not alone
    Because I have been there too

    I want you to know that I believe you
    Even though I know you're full of lies
    I promise that I will never doubt you
    As I'm looking into your eyes

    I want you to know that I can feel you
    Even from across the room
    That broken part of you can be mended
    It doesn't have to be your doom

    I just want you to know that I can see you
    Though someone's left your goodness to spoil
    Remember, none of us are perfect
    And in my eyes, you're beautiful.

    Submitted on 2007-09-11 13:46:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the way this write was adventurous and passionate, like a sadness and a giggle at the same time. It holds the perfect metaphor for the unveiling of oneself, it is so uncommon for most people to give all themselves at once, but finally when I CAN SEE YOU I know you I understand you, I love you.

    great write
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by L.L.COLLINS | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, the blindness of burgeoning love is sweeping over you in this piece Raivn. We all want to believe the best about the one who has caught our eye and is wheedling into our heart.
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh, i cant help but love these sad little bits of life and truth

    "I want you to know that I believe you
    Even though I know you're full of lies"
    the most saddeningly true couplet i have heard in days

    "Remember, none of us are perfect
    And in my eyes, you're beautiful.'
    i love this line, the sweet purity of sentiment here, the way the friendship and comraderie rides as high as the romantic need and feelings

    i like this piece quite a bit
    absolutely spiffy, dear

    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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