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    dots Submission Name: Game of Chancedots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 628
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       B.S. piece I wrote last night...


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    dotsGame of Chancedots
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    Pick up the pieces of the puzzle
    I think there's something missing
    I know I'm holding back
    When it's your lips I should be kissing

    Give the wheel a hefty spin
    Let's see where it lands
    And while we wait with baited breath
    Let me die at the touch of your hands

    Take aim at that elusive bullseye
    And just throw another dart
    Be sure to take your greedy indecision
    And keep it far away from my heart

    Give the dice another roll
    Take another glance
    Fate has nothing to do with us
    It's all a game of chance.




    Submitted on 2007-09-11 13:48:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the rhyme I was thinking of it as the same melody as one of my own songs
    the name is escaping me oh wait its called BAM
    check it and youll totaly know what Im talking about
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by xSaraHx | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with those two. I might add that most of life is taking a chance. It is when we fail after taking a chance, that we actually realize we took a chance. The rest we seem to take for granted. We take a million chances a day without giving it a second thought, so we pass it off as life. Anything we do without fear of rejection, or fear of dying, or fear of taking another breath is just a chance we took, but also took for granted. For example, you can sit and talk to a guy for 3 minutes, without giving it a second thought. He takes your credit card, he prepares your food, and you drive away from the drive-thru only worrying that they stiffed you for your fries. You drive along munching your poison happily and stop at a red light. The guy in the car next to you smiles at you. You blush and can't speak. Why was it easy to talk to a geek at McDonald's and trust him to put food in your mouth and not charge anything to your credit card number that he just copied, but you are afraid to even give Sancho in the Nissan a little wave? McDonald's was a chance you take for granted. Let down your guard and wave at Sancho - take that chance and the next time you smile at Sancho, it too, will never again feel like a chance.
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Very clever and true write
    As I said in another comment awhile ago to someone else
    Life is one big game of chance
    We have to take chances in order to move forward
    we never truly fail when taking a chance because the knowledge learned from taking that chance helps us move forward
    I really like how you cleverly show that life is a game of chance
    Excellent Work!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please keep in touch
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      For sure life and love are both chancy propositions at best. If you never take a chance just think of all that will be missed. Even heartache has something in it that leaves a lesson learned.
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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