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    dots Submission Name: 5 seconds.dots

    Author: impassive sky
    ASL Info:    17 / F / CT
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 185/190/55
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I wrote this in a fifteen seconds period about a minute ago.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dots5 seconds.dots

    And something hypnotizing
    Searingly deep and barely moving
    Catches your attention
    and for a second you
    Drop everything
    Forget what it was
    that was bothering you so
    and chase it
    for the remainder
    of your life.

    Submitted on 2007-09-11 14:32:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoy pieces that just spill out of us and this piece shows that there is always something we can find in life to focus on other than problems and we can find purpose for a lifetime!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm going to be completely honest. This poem has so much meaning in so little words. I have a little rush of happy adrenaline after reading this. Its almost as if it gives hope to whomever may need it. Its the little things in life that make it worth it and this poem is a true show of this. This poem is most definitely going into my favorites!
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by silentpoison | [ Reply to This ]
      What a little beauty of a poem and how true! I shall have to read more of your work. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
    I really like this
    I agree with Raivn that I to found this write to be striking
    This definately made me think and realize even more that you have to live life to its fullest
    We as humans have a habit of procrastinating and I am finally starting to realize that time does add up and sadly we will never get it back again
    Thank You for awakening my mind to this
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Let's see! This is a piece as the title suggests that can be read in "5 Seconds" or less! lol! I think you say much with little, but the only problem I had with it is that when you started the piece out with and that leads the reader to believe that there should have been something above that line elaborating in a much greater manner. It's not bad at all, but I don't believe it should start with and, but hey! The beauty of writing is that you are free to do what you want.
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]

    I don't know what else to say...something about this really strikes me...

    Particularly, the idea that your life can change in a matter of seconds...and you'll chase whatever caused it to the ends of the earth...
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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