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    dots Submission Name: Our future...dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/623/381
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Knowing I've hurt the only person I have truly loved, knowing I would never intentionally do such thing yet I have managed to do just that.

    I know I will make up for such mistakes in the future and the time we spend together. Although I do wish I could simply erase such mistakes.


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    dotsOur future...dots
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    "Our" past comes back to me...
    These thoughts that cross my mind of us,
    of the time we have shared together, bring a smile to this face of mine.

    And yet I know I have made my share of mistakes.
    I know my intentions were always good, but things never seem to go the way they were planned.

    I know I hurt you...
    I know I have disappointed you...

    I hope that my intentions weren't overlooked throughout the pain I caused.
    I hope you understand I'd never hurt you intentionally.

    Our future, I know, is going to be bright and filled with joy.
    I know I will make up for all those mistakes I've made.

    I love you, and I'm sorry.
    For I never meant to hurt you.




    Submitted on 2007-09-11 15:23:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      when you can pour out your heart for everyone to see that takes real courage. I give you props on writing something of this degree. Although we make mistakes its our nature no one is perfect....

    To put yourself in the sense of showing your emotional scars is something many ppl wish they could do.

    Excellent job and keep it up
    | Posted on 2009-07-29 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      I applaud you for laying your soul out for all to see. It is a good thing to make yourself vulnerable and transparent as an artist of any kind whether it be a Writer, Painter or Musician. This connects you with the reader in a very important way, but I must say that some of it was too obvious for me. It didn't seem to challenge me. This isn't a cut down, but it is an encouragement to continue to write from your heart. A poem should have elements of the heart and structure to be a great piece of work.
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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