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    dots Submission Name: Breathedots
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    Author: takenspiritwind
    ASL Info:    21/F/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 117/95/38
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Haiku/Passion
    Total Views: 533
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 84



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    dotsBreathedots
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    Our bodies as one
    moving to the sound of breath
    a sweet sound of heart




    Submitted on 2007-09-11 17:52:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Fabulous...

    I think it's amazing how well this puts a picture in my head...

    Words are really incredible things, you know?

    I love it!
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this little ditty of a Haiku
    To me you are describing how all of us are an intricate piece of a much larger puzzle
    There is a reason to everything and you showed that quite well in your few words
    Great Job
    Very Thought Provoking
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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