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    dots Submission Name: gentledots

    Author: XmaryjaneX
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 142/38/9
    Words: 355
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       i know i know
    i suck ass
    you don't have to even say it..

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    "The gentle rain is best for all
    and least destructive when it falls
    so a gentle word, a gentle touch
    To a tender heart, can mean so much."

    but when it's all said and done
    when your lies have finally shot down the sun

    darkness it rains now
    your blackened heart
    gloats in its' sickness
    as it continuesly rapes my soul
    leaving me breatheless
    with angish;
    spinning out of control

    Taking your self hatred out on me
    My love you so carelessly disowned
    Manipulately morphing it into something unknown

    I see you out on the edge
    of a dark, perilous ledge
    staring down,
    drenched in plight
    all hope out of sight

    I reach out to you
    Pleading "take my hand"
    you look at me with tear filled eyes
    as my voice fades into the skies
    i approach and wipe your tears

    holding on
    Breathing in your fears and sorrows
    from past years
    taking your pain as mine
    no longer your soul will it define

    Darkness is all i see
    As i seem to lose my feet
    Falling to my knees
    I can't breathe

    Warmth like nothing known to man comes o'er me like a blanket
    Nothing can break or shake it
    Like a glove of purest sunshine,
    to my soul it binds

    Passing on long felt grief
    My vision clearing to my relief

    And here we are
    holding eachother
    soft embraces
    i can feel your pulse race
    as your hand traces my face
    shattered souls gazing into one another
    Passing love...

    not emotion
    but love..
    into forever..

    love conquering our minds
    our lives
    our hearts
    as all logic begins to part

    Down pour of rain
    Our strength now regained
    As we walk side by side
    This is were we reside
    We are One
    You don't understand
    But We don't expect you to
    All we can do is speak the truth

    When you love someone
    Nothing gets in your way
    Nothing can sway
    Just Because
    Where your heart lies
    is where your feet will stay

    Submitted on 2007-09-11 19:32:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this poem. you such a grat poet Grace . Keep this is it up and you'll you could truly be noticed.

    Love alway.
    | Posted on 2007-10-14 00:00:00 | by DrkRomeo_sGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      good, good, good. I really, truly think you did a job well done on this piece. It has a lot to it and can be interpreted in some many ways, but thats good to me. Good job. -canarddoue
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by canarddoue | [ Reply to This ]

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