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i know i know
i suck ass
you don't have to even say it..
"The gentle rain is best for all
and least destructive when it falls
so a gentle word, a gentle touch
To a tender heart, can mean so much."
but when it's all said and done
when your lies have finally shot down the sun
darkness it rains now
your blackened heart
gloats in its' sickness
as it continuesly rapes my soul
leaving me breatheless
spinning out of control
Taking your self hatred out on me
My love you so carelessly disowned
Manipulately morphing it into something unknown
I see you out on the edge
of a dark, perilous ledge
drenched in plight
all hope out of sight
I reach out to you
Pleading "take my hand"
you look at me with tear filled eyes
as my voice fades into the skies
i approach and wipe your tears
Breathing in your fears and sorrows
from past years
taking your pain as mine
no longer your soul will it define
Darkness is all i see
As i seem to lose my feet
Falling to my knees
I can't breathe
Warmth like nothing known to man comes o'er me like a blanket
Nothing can break or shake it
Like a glove of purest sunshine,
to my soul it binds
Passing on long felt grief
My vision clearing to my relief
And here we are
i can feel your pulse race
as your hand traces my face
shattered souls gazing into one another
love conquering our minds
as all logic begins to part
Down pour of rain
Our strength now regained
As we walk side by side
This is were we reside
We are One
You don't understand
But We don't expect you to
All we can do is speak the truth
When you love someone
Nothing gets in your way
Nothing can sway
Where your heart lies
is where your feet will stay
Submitted on 2007-09-11 19:32:45
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i really like this poem. you such a grat poet Grace . Keep this is it up and you'll you could truly be noticed.
| Posted on 2007-10-14 00:00:00 | by
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good, good, good. I really, truly think you did a job well done on this piece. It has a lot to it and can be interpreted in some many ways, but thats good to me. Good job. -canarddoue
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