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    dots Submission Name: "life turns to sex".dots
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    Author: Magger32
    ASL Info:    18-female-PA.
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 53/131/124
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       IDK?!! a good time?


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    dots"life turns to sex".dots
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    Shadows follow my lead.
    Falling into fire.
    This is the love I once used to desire.

    I miss falling into your eyes,
    Resting in your arms.
    Dam I guess you just made me feel so strong.



    Your shirt off shows your beautiful body…
    And here I am thinking about another somebody.

    This is all not right.
    This I know.
    Still I stay to show…
    Just how stupid I am.

    I hold your hand as we walk to the field.
    Waking past the fears I wield.
    I don’t want to leave him,
    Everything I though was real.
    Ohh well, that is just how I feel.
    You’re the one behind the wheel.

    I give into temptation.
    It feels too good, to be real.
    Now this is how I feel. !

    Make sense?

    NO!!




    Submitted on 2007-09-11 19:51:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I give into temptation.
    It feels too good, to be real.
    Now this is how I feel. !

    Make sense?

    NO!!"


    Man, do I feel this...

    Temptation...it'll do you in every d*mn time.
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I can totally feel your confusion. Its like some sick game of tug-a-war. i know what you're saying, you give into temptation even though you know you shouldn't. if i had a dime for everytime that happens to me....

    cheers
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by Alyra | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm
    just a little lost here
    help me out of my fudmuddlebent, please

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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