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    dots Submission Name: War for Peacedots
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    Author: Mandolin
    ASL Info:    10/15/89
    Elite Ratio:    5.4 - 131/145/85
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1075
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1382



    Description:
       Should the title be "Waring Peace"???

    For my beloved.
    I die to myself daily, for you - for you for you for you for you!!!

    For you.


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    dotsWar for Peacedots
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    Of a ferocity gentled,
    of a newness kindled,
    of a passion rewarded
    and of the sorrow comforted,
    on the grounds of a peace,
    enduring.
    Lasting.
    A ground unbreechable,
    a banner that cannot fall,
    a standard unbreakable,
    the herald’s cry that will never go mute.
    Lasting.




    A fight
    for the shining grail.
    The war raged against who you have been
    to become the one able to love tomorrow,
    fiercely love.

    To love,
    to love the Beloved,
    openly but not freely.
    Never easy – never taken lightly,
    never in one stride,
    never freely.
    Raging but never angry,
    eager but not impatient.
    Never undeserved are the gifts given,
    the receiver is never undeserving
    but priceless are the kisses kissed,
    painful are the deaths died.

    Truth is to stand, and fight,
    truth never gives in,
    truth never dies.

    Priceless words are spoken,
    never to be given to another,
    this ground will not be lost,
    these hearts will not retreat.
    This can never be retraced.

    To love,
    to fiercely love.

    Always remember,
    this peace was fought for.

    This truth was died for.




    Submitted on 2007-09-11 19:58:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dang!! That's really all I have to say. Honestly, every line was like a poetic blow in the gut, it was amazing. Truly, this is something written from deep understanding on the topic, and care. I love it, and that is all I have to say. Simply blown away.
    Be well, Mando
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2007-11-24 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      No i like the title you have for it....Don't change it. I clicked on it not reading what kind of poem it was. I thought it was going to be a piece on War...(well in fact it sorta is)..but, not the war i thought it was going to be about. Any how as i read on..i find it is about love...and the battles we fight to give our love and our true selfs to someone we care so deeply for...

    A fight
    for the shining grail.
    The war raged against who you have been
    to become the one able to love tomorrow,
    fiercely love.
    this is my favorite part in the whole writing..And its because i can relate....In my own relationship of 15 years i have had many transformations...I think you have to change in a relationship to meet the needs of the relationship..its changing without giving up your identity that counts for the most..You meet the needs of the relationship without scraficing your morals and values as one person...Some how you have to work together to merge morals and values together to make them the relationships morals and values...It is a war in itself.....Love is rough..but it also to me is one of my greatest expriences in life!!

    Of a ferocity gentled,
    of a newness kindled,
    of a passion rewarded
    and of the sorrow comforted,
    on the grounds of a peace,
    enduring.
    Forever,
    and ever,
    eternal
    ...not sure i really like the forever and ever, eternal...i think for me...it kinda draws me away from the power of this piece!!

    Overall...I think you are a fantastic writer...that is why am here...to find people who are truly gifted writers and maybe take away something that can maybe make me a stronger...and even tho my exprience is limited...i hope to also give something back...Thanx..have a great day and take care!!!

    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by anile2 | [ Reply to This ]
      Extremely powerful ending.
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Me Rambling | [ Reply to This ]


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