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    dots Submission Name: Public Speakingdots
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    Author: mysterious one
    ASL Info:    24/f/in my head
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 58/57/17
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsPublic Speakingdots
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    I stand in a room
    with hundreds of chairs
    everyone sits
    everyone stares

    I open my mouth
    but nothing comes out
    my voice is silenced
    my sanity's in doubt

    My heart is pounding
    palms with sweat
    my mind is racing
    with thoughts of regret

    What was I thinking
    when I raised my hand
    I can't go through with this
    I'm falling in quick sand

    The light is dimming
    the room is blurred
    I hear people whispering
    what's wrong with her

    The last thing I see
    before it goes black
    is the dissapointment on his face
    I wish I hadn't seen that

    I close my eyes
    and lose my grip
    I fall to the floor
    and then that's it




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      Ah, the fear of public speaking has come through loud and clear in this piece. I have one suggestion for you: in the line "my sanity is doubt" I believe would read better as "my sanity's in doubt". What do you think?
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      How much I've wished that proverbial hole in the floor would become reality at times! I enjoyed your poem because I've been there. Fortunately, I never fainted or did anything too embarrassing. I can't resist sharing a trick I learned along the way. Start with something funny that happened on the way to the event or earlier in the day. Once the audience is laughing, you've got them in your hands, and your hands are no longer shaking. This was really a fun poem to read and I hope your public speaking goes well! :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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