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    dots Submission Name: Joeydots
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    Author: bob D
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 4/6/4
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsJoeydots
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    Mr. Crayola Man
    What have they done to you?
    They seem to have craved you down
    From a cheerful yellow to a deep blue

    You always you used to smile
    But now you just seem to frown
    thinking about all the times
    The world would just grind you down

    Mr. Crayola man
    What did she tell you?
    Did she tell you about love,
    then left you in the pew?

    You just tryed to give some color
    when the world was black & white
    but maybe someday Crayola
    they'll understand who was right

    Mr. Crayola Man




    Submitted on 2007-09-11 21:18:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Poor Joe..... Damn. good poem all in all mostly because i understand it off the bat.
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by Hazy skies | [ Reply to This ]
      hey! i like this write...i've never read anything like it. i realy like the lines:
    "You just tryed to give some color
    when the world was black & white"

    when i was reading it, i dint get it at first...but i then i read the rest and i think i understand a little bit now.....

    overall i do like htis write...keep it up!!

    *kate
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]


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