Haggard women sleeping still
rhythmed riots breaking will
crazed lights show the putrid smells
sounds of smoke and lust and hell
trash in human hand and form
charm that's bought and deeply worn
sweet catharsis take me now
There are some good lines in this piece, It is short and to the point and that is a positive thing. This Idea could be expanded upon if you desired to do so. It isn't necessary but it is something worth considering.