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    dots Submission Name: Canaday Anydaydots
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    Author: kma12790
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 28/41/18
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       oh cambridge. the things you see.


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    dotsCanaday Anydaydots
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    Haggard women sleeping still
    rhythmed riots breaking will
    crazed lights show the putrid smells
    sounds of smoke and lust and hell
    trash in human hand and form
    charm that's bought and deeply worn
    sweet catharsis take me now
    swell
    crash
    down
    ambivalent bow.




    Submitted on 2007-09-11 21:32:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There are some good lines in this piece, It is short and to the point and that is a positive thing. This Idea could be expanded upon if you desired to do so. It isn't necessary but it is something worth considering.
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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