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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Fire and light,
    bombs, death.
    Acrid smoke,
    struggle for breath.
    Nothing to see,
    heat overcomes.
    All they can hear
    is battle drums.
    Bullets flying,
    shrapnel kills.
    Overcoming pain,
    swallowing pills.
    Terror attacks,
    armies amass.
    Terror attacked,
    we kick it's ass.
    Towers fall,
    morale is low,
    But we got him cornered,
    no-where to go.
    Brothers-in-arms,
    stand side by side.
    They never forget
    those who have died.




    Submitted on 2007-09-12 00:06:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was a realy good write!! its kool that you did something for 9/11....

    your poem had a very nice flow to it! yup...keep it up!!

    *kate
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]


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