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    dots Submission Name: The Bridgedots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Bridgedots
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    I stand at the top,
    staring straight down.
    I'm sick and tired
    of this crappy old town.

    Watching the water,
    black as abyss,
    I can think of nothing
    that I will miss.

    My future is bleak,
    but so is my past.
    I could end it all
    so very, very fast.

    I take a step,
    there's no going back.
    Now I will find
    the answers I lack.

    Leaving behind
    my mother and home,
    In search of my place
    this world I will roam.




    Submitted on 2007-09-12 00:12:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. good job.. I don't really know what else to say but I really like it.
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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