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    dots Submission Name: im giving up on youdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
    Total Views: 663
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       im done
    im over him
    ive finally realised i dont need him
    it wasnt that i still loved him
    it was that i wasnt ready to forget
    now i am and i look foward to my life and the choises im about to make


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    im giving up on you
    its over done never to be re lived
    ive moved on with my life
    nothing good ever came from me and you
    now i finally see
    i meant nothing to you and now you mean nothing to me
    no more tears will fall from my eyes
    no more scars written with a blade
    no more poems about what used to be
    im done
    given up on you and me
    my memories are gone
    cant tell the diffrence between truth and lie
    no more forgivness no more tries
    its time i moved on
    time i said good-bye
    gone from my life
    the story is written
    the book has been closed
    its over its done
    ive given up on you
    forever




    Submitted on 2007-09-12 01:12:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can really relate to alot of your writing its like the words are things i feel and need to say i had trouble moving on and i still aint found neone who has been able to fix my broken heart but u have and that gives me hop ei really enjoy all your writing
    | Posted on 2008-01-30 00:00:00 | by biffy2006 | [ Reply to This ]
      oh hun i know just how you feel
    except my hearts still in love with him v.v

    anyways
    it was very moving it made me want to cry
    rach
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this, it seems so final....which I am hoping is the point of the poem.

    Trust me, giving it all up is a very hard road, i am assuming that this write is about a guy? A few of my poems are about my ex who means nothing to me now, but the road to feeling nothing was so paved full of obsticles (calling me, asking to see me) that I felt like I'd take one step forward and two steps back.

    Anyway, I hope you can see how much better off you are without this person in your life, life is hard enough with out people lying and deceiving us all the time.

    Great Write.

    Tink

    P.S. I hope some of whatI said made sense
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]


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