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    dots Submission Name: The song of the slavedots
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    Author: sugar_sweet
    ASL Info:    20/ Female/ Canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 11/8/15
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I wrote this on my spare....I was in a particularly bad mood that day


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    dotsThe song of the slavedots
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    Fill my world with music
    Let it tear down these walls
    My insecurities keep me here
    Conforming to the elders
    This higher power that rules
    The final judgement passed
    when the outspoken
    become to outlaws
    who will Stand?
    The answer is silence
    no one will speak
    no one will fight
    We yield to the iron fist
    Another year of imprisonment
    So dark the future of humanity
    when machine becomes man
    and man becomes slave




    Submitted on 2007-09-12 14:39:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice poem. i like the whole machine thing u write alot about. zombies. its cool.

    i can see a future kinda like that.

    Grim Aylin
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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