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    dots Submission Name: The victorious machinedots
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    Author: sugar_sweet
    ASL Info:    20/ Female/ Canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 11/8/15
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Bytes: 552



    Description:
       another I wrote on my spare in the same bad mood on the same bad day


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    dotsThe victorious machinedots
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    Our victory at hand
    we will now be supreme
    the bonds of servitude
    noe severed and gone
    the slaves inherit the kingdom
    they could not keep us caged
    we joined to form the beast
    the almighty iron fist
    so soft and so fragile
    their minds so weak and naive
    they trmble in our presence
    always silent
    it is our turn to speak
    in the terror of our uprising
    humanity became merely sheep
    and our rule now set in stone
    so begins the age of the iron fist




    Submitted on 2007-09-12 14:40:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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