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    dots Submission Name: Sick Insidedots
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    Author: haileebobailee
    ASL Info:    18/F/NV
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 30/41/15
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSick Insidedots
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    Photographic Memories
    spill to the floor,
    as she tears
    her past
    off of crimson walls.

    Parties & Roadtrips
    crash and collide
    into a pile of ripped
    up love letters,
    and broken picture frames.

    So sick inside
    she falls,
    hitting rock bottom
    when its too late.

    He had loved her.
    but a lack
    of self control drove
    his heart
    a thousand miles
    to California.

    Her mistake
    is her prison
    as flashbacks
    of that night
    come to mind.

    A kiss.
    A touch.
    A dark room.
    and another boy.

    She tells the truth
    and he throws
    her words
    in her face.
    Like the sweater
    she bought him
    for his birthday.

    The reds and blues
    blurred through tears.
    But the smell
    undeniably his.

    Photographic Memories
    fall to the floor
    to burn
    like her heart
    with the light
    of one match




    Submitted on 2007-09-12 14:46:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is sad -
    all we are left with are memories....
    The visuals are very clear; I love it when the images come off the page and burn into your mind.
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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