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    dots Submission Name: You know what ...... means for us?dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 698
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    dotsYou know what ...... means for us?dots
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    You know what water means for us?
    Quenches thirst
    Sigh of relaxation

    You know what food means to us?
    Energy
    Strength

    You know what oxygen means to us?
    Life
    Survival

    And last but certainly not least...
    I hope and pray everyday you know what you are to me.

    You are my....

    Water,
    Food,
    Oxygen,

    And so much more

    You raise me up when I have fallen
    You take the best of care of me when I have fallen ill of a cold.
    No matter what, you do your best, to be the best for me!

    Certainly, without a doubt in my mind.
    You are, and forever will be my World!




    Submitted on 2007-09-12 15:55:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is good, I enjoyed it. Putting across the point that you need this person to survive, its very sweet. Hope to hear from you soon. Shadow
    | Posted on 2007-10-28 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like what you've done here,
    but I think you could use a rhyme or a metaphor
    to smooth it out. But its a good work.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      This is much better than the last poem of yours that I've read tonight. It more creative in every sense of the word. The only thing that I can suggest is that you try to go into other subjects rather than just love poems. I, myself would like to see a different side of you.
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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