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On the inside looking out


Author: soaring eyes
ASL Info:    17/f/ga
Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18 /30 /19
Words: 227
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Being a Teen
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Description:


Mad at the world ... and my so called friends... just wanting to be able to be me. So I can stop pretending to be someone that I know I am not.


On the inside looking out



I'm in society wishing to be out
longing to be free
hoping that one day I'm not the one that's doing all of the judging.

On the Inside of the "in-crowd"
destroying peoples lives
listen to their cries... their cries which comes from me.

A leader not following
making other's decisions
making race not just the division but
with a knife making the incision into the hearts of many and not even caring.

Not on the outside looking in... but
On the inside looking out.
Wanting to shout for my liberty
Not death
for I'm dying inside
tearing down the walls of my undeveloped pride
no one truly knows the hurt that I hide.
I rather be me
be free
just see
how it is to flee from pain and confusion
to a life of happiness... pure bliss
feel the kiss of a flower
heart pure as dove
wear a glove
to wipe the desk
and put the evidence to the test
and my evolution to rest because it is so complete.
I want to look up
not down
carry a hat on my head
not a crown
for in this I pray
that for not tomorrow if just today
I could be the one to say
I was on the outside looking away






Submitted on 2007-09-12 16:55:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow.
poem is very good.
i really enjoyed reading it.
vey well-written.
and im glad you came to see how you are :]
and to write it in a poem and to show the world that you want ot change.
very nice :]

| Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by tiffaroox3 | [ Reply to This ]
  wow its so hard to leave a comment on this. words cant describe the amazing pieace you have here. this truly great and you should be proud.
kristian
| Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
  This is awful. From the line breaks to the tired rhyme scheme, doesn't seem very well thought out at all. A good poem needs good images. An average poem needs at least average images.
| Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by eliwhitneyradio | [ Reply to This ]
  Very profound and well executed. Not many people have the propensity to honestly look at their lives. I am sure that you will strike a few chords with whoever reads this.

Well done.

Frank.
| Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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