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    dots Submission Name: On the inside looking outdots
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    Author: soaring eyes
    ASL Info:    17/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18/30/19
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 618
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1397



    Description:
       Mad at the world ... and my so called friends... just wanting to be able to be me. So I can stop pretending to be someone that I know I am not.


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    dotsOn the inside looking outdots
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    I'm in society wishing to be out
    longing to be free
    hoping that one day I'm not the one that's doing all of the judging.

    On the Inside of the "in-crowd"
    destroying peoples lives
    listen to their cries... their cries which comes from me.

    A leader not following
    making other's decisions
    making race not just the division but
    with a knife making the incision into the hearts of many and not even caring.

    Not on the outside looking in... but
    On the inside looking out.
    Wanting to shout for my liberty
    Not death
    for I'm dying inside
    tearing down the walls of my undeveloped pride
    no one truly knows the hurt that I hide.
    I rather be me
    be free
    just see
    how it is to flee from pain and confusion
    to a life of happiness... pure bliss
    feel the kiss of a flower
    heart pure as dove
    wear a glove
    to wipe the desk
    and put the evidence to the test
    and my evolution to rest because it is so complete.
    I want to look up
    not down
    carry a hat on my head
    not a crown
    for in this I pray
    that for not tomorrow if just today
    I could be the one to say
    I was on the outside looking away






    Submitted on 2007-09-12 16:55:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow.
    poem is very good.
    i really enjoyed reading it.
    vey well-written.
    and im glad you came to see how you are :]
    and to write it in a poem and to show the world that you want ot change.
    very nice :]

    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by tiffaroox3 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow its so hard to leave a comment on this. words cant describe the amazing pieace you have here. this truly great and you should be proud.
    kristian
    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
      This is awful. From the line breaks to the tired rhyme scheme, doesn't seem very well thought out at all. A good poem needs good images. An average poem needs at least average images.
    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by eliwhitneyradio | [ Reply to This ]
      Very profound and well executed. Not many people have the propensity to honestly look at their lives. I am sure that you will strike a few chords with whoever reads this.

    Well done.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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