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    dots Submission Name: Anotherdots
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    Author: truthbetold
    ASL Info:    20-f
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 38/45/33
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 790
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 411



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    dotsAnotherdots
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    Another person dying
    Another person crying
    Another head hanging low
    Another problem you can't let go

    Another war started
    Another family parted
    Another issue that went too far
    Another bruise another scar

    Another friend left
    Another death
    Another soul that fell apart
    All because of one broken heart





    Submitted on 2007-09-12 16:59:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very good use of quick fast words to describe sadness
    To me you are referring to how The World will always have problems nomatter how hard we try to fix them all
    This write can also signify a personal struggle in ones life with their own friends and family
    Nice Job!!
    Looking forward to more writes from you in the future
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmmmm may i ask who was this about?
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]


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