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    dots Submission Name: 2 Waysdots

    Author: soaring eyes
    ASL Info:    17/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18/30/19
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 859
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1267


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    dots2 Waysdots

    Slow kisses
    Sweet touches
    From night time blisses
    to child hood crushes
    But I'm no longer a child...
    My body has now developed
    curves in all the right places
    lips soft
    having all the right tastes.
    No longer scared to show my love to him in a sexual form of expression
    Now having all the right answers
    to all the right questions.
    I'm experiencing new things
    taking new routes
    Now trying to find my way through
    instead of my way out.
    I close my eyes as I lay and his body is exploring me.
    Making a way in
    pain and pleasure flows over me.
    Hurts to the fullest
    but feels so good.
    this moment in time I wouldn't explain if i could...
    My first time.
    With my last
    the one i will marry and make furture with
    not a past
    opening up a brand new :class:
    intimate expression
    he has given me a new lesson
    how to love physically and emtionally
    to the point where i don't want anyone else to hold on to me.
    a new race
    no more a chace
    no one can take his place
    cause he holds this memory that will never be erased : )

    Submitted on 2007-09-12 18:21:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Any expression of love and intamacy is worthy of a comment. Very well put together and vividly expressed.

    Very well done.

    | Posted on 2008-03-17 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      THis was great and I can relate to it in so many ways I love tghe way you just let it flow stright from your soul...Something like this is hard to describe i agree..I like this alot because this is how i feel abotu my partner of 4 months now...my fave part is when you stated the one i will marry and make furture with
    not a past
    and opening up a brand new :class:
    intimate expression
    he has given me a new lesson
    this is true for most people who feel like this i learn something new everyday..and last but not least to the point where i don't want anyone else to hold on to me.
    this is what i like most cuz it shows that your really trying to make it work and that your being honest to make it last great write a fave!
    | Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by Hip-Hop Honey | [ Reply to This ]
      Well this piece would make a really good TLC song (Left Eye Would be Proud.) but as a piece of poetry it's more of something that teens would be able to relate too rather than grown adults. I guess what I'm saying is that this will not grab the attention of more mature readers, but never fear, teens will go nuts over it.
    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]

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