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    dots Submission Name: Fettered to my Souldots
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    Author: Priestess
    ASL Info:    21/female/usa
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 49/118/51
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Haven't written in awhile, sorry....tell me what this poem means to you.


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    dotsFettered to my Souldots
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    Fettered to a soul within...
    A soul of hate, a soul of sin.

    And haunted by an insane spirit...
    I'm not psychotic, can't you hear it?

    This spirit that misguides my rage...
    Like an animal, in need of a cage.

    This cage that haunts my sadistic dreams...
    Though to you, nightmares they would seem.

    And there is no way to rid of this demon...
    So run and hide, if you do see him.

    "Run and hide," I dare to say...
    Don't end up like me, his prey.




    Submitted on 2007-09-12 20:26:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good poem. i like it. a slave to ur own desire.

    peace

    Grim Aylin
    | Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      I quite like it. Simple but powerful rhymes. First thing that came to mind from it was self-harming. To me it sounds like a warning from a self harmer to not get in to SH. I like the line:
    A soul of hate, a soul of sin
    ~ I can relate to that.

    If it does by any chance have anything to do with SH, then the last 2 words: his prey would be personification of SH, which is a great literary tool.

    Along with all the things that Martin said, you have written a great work of literary art.

    ~DBE~
    | Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by DBE | [ Reply to This ]
      Well this piece could be about Addiction, Loss of self-control or maybe even someone who has some sort of mental disability such as Bi-Polar Disorder. Could be a cautionary tale. At least this is the feedback I can give you from my personal opinion. Then again this poem could have a double meaning, that's the beauty of art, you can say more than one thing at a time.
    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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