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    dots Submission Name: Hopeful Little Girl dots
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    Author: Kay
    ASL Info:    15/f/
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 216/197/68
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Misc
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    Description:
       This is dedicated to my neice Amylah. Who at the moment is only 4 months old. Her father is an abusive; huge; guy. who is on steriods. He used to play for the UNLV football team, but got kicked off because of the steriods. He even made it to the NFL tryouts and was even asked to play for the Colts, but they don't accept any one with the history of steriods. His name is Terrance. My sister Elsa has been going out with him for an year now. She is in denail that she's in an abusive relationship. She says those bruises are accidents. I've seen him grab her and drag her to the car. I've seen him mistreat her. The Child Services have taken Amylah away from them. Elsa claims to be in love while Terrance calls her a bitch.


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    dotsHopeful Little Girl dots
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    Impatient little girl,
    running around,
    secretly knowing the world.
    still smiles, & makes no sound;
    while dancing across in twirls,
    laughing, with her princess crown.

    and if you saw...
    she looks amazing;
    dancing along with dolls?
    she looks deadly.

    For she's just a little girl

    and there you are,
    pushing around mother
    calling her "bitch", "slut", "star".
    Saying lil girl aint your daughter;
    When she looks just like you!

    Little girl is gone.
    Why are you trying to see her?
    Didn't you claim, she aint your song?
    Arenít you the one, abusing mother?

    Cute little baby

    Will grow up;
    wondering about daddy;
    wonder why she's not
    in mommies custody.

    and when she reads the papers;
    she'll know;

    you're not the father
    she was hoping for.




    Submitted on 2007-09-12 21:55:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      So Sad so terribly terribly sad
    I will never understand why parents have kids if they are only going to abuse them
    Elsa has to realize this man is extremely abuse and cant be around the child OR HER
    I Pray to God she wakes up before its too late
    I will be Praying for little Amylah and you and your family
    God Bless
    Ron
    I have been told my writes are very uplifting perhaps they can help you feel better
    Please take care of Yourself
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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