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    dots Submission Name: The Nature Ofdots
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    Author: Myopic
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 31/58/63
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Nature Ofdots
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    thus vibrates the
    ripe planet,
    suddenly jostling, (fluid filled
    home slipstream). On opened eyes is a
    man sitting on sidewalk
    completely clothed, furrowed brow,
    youthfully, he would walk and turn sideways into a warpath
    line of fire - surprising (yet) hopeful.
    he would, of course, not oblige as I turn
    into a small boy weening off of
    his mother's milk.
    yes, I,
    yes, O -
    global anticipation marked,
    however:
    seventeen and skinned
    and on the outer rim so
    jumping for adoration of the trees in the forest -
    not that he had any idea
    (or ways to force us).
    tell
    me.
    what
    yelling?
    stop. go.
    home. flee?
    gap flipped.
    great self,
    great self,
    great
    self.
    reading, he perfects for gun chamber to chamber bars -
    as gratuitous oozing of mouths take place all around her brows.
    a humid, damp, green, and chirping feeling of a field,
    so alive with organic selves from stars to start a field
    of feelings.




    Submitted on 2007-09-13 06:23:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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