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    dots Submission Name: Just when I thought things were Okdots
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    Author: xSaraHx
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 107/75/47
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    Description:
       spur of the moment angry complete with real tears
    not about a threesome


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    dotsJust when I thought things were Okdots
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    You did some stupid shit and started chipping away at my heart

    with a small hatchet she tried to pry us apart

    and to think that you helped her

    what was going through your head

    why all the change

    things not good well they were for me

    but you sure know how to kill a room

    and I cant save everyone

    hell I will barely be able to save myself from whats happening

    all of it unspoken

    and the only reason is cuz Im a stupid girl

    or I just dont wana be the straw to break the camels back

    Not to sound selfish but if we break apart its going to be "my fault"

    and you know why people will say I ruined it ?

    because you will make your thoughts heard too loud and the people wont forget

    they like you better and will take your side

    they will call me a whore and a worthless bitch

    because I would not stya with a group of three

    and I wasnt enough to satisfy your heart




    Submitted on 2007-09-13 17:38:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is gonna be weird but I was the person your writing about in my last relationship. I was the guy that everyone knew with the clingy, weird girlfriend that I was always this close to breaking up with or cheating on.
    I'd like to say that Im not that guy anymore. And not just cuz I did end up ending that relationship, but cuz I realized what a [censored]in douche I was. So for all the guys like me, I'd like to apologize. Sorry.

    nice piece by the way. raw and real.

    but yeah, sorry.
    | Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]


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