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Just when I thought things were Ok

Author: xSaraHx
ASL Info:    17/Female/Earth
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spur of the moment angry complete with real tears
not about a threesome

Just when I thought things were Ok

You did some stupid shit and started chipping away at my heart

with a small hatchet she tried to pry us apart

and to think that you helped her

what was going through your head

why all the change

things not good well they were for me

but you sure know how to kill a room

and I cant save everyone

hell I will barely be able to save myself from whats happening

all of it unspoken

and the only reason is cuz Im a stupid girl

or I just dont wana be the straw to break the camels back

Not to sound selfish but if we break apart its going to be "my fault"

and you know why people will say I ruined it ?

because you will make your thoughts heard too loud and the people wont forget

they like you better and will take your side

they will call me a whore and a worthless bitch

because I would not stya with a group of three

and I wasnt enough to satisfy your heart

Submitted on 2007-09-13 17:38:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is gonna be weird but I was the person your writing about in my last relationship. I was the guy that everyone knew with the clingy, weird girlfriend that I was always this close to breaking up with or cheating on.
I'd like to say that Im not that guy anymore. And not just cuz I did end up ending that relationship, but cuz I realized what a [censored]in douche I was. So for all the guys like me, I'd like to apologize. Sorry.

nice piece by the way. raw and real.

but yeah, sorry.
| Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]

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