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    dots Submission Name: Death of a Thousand Rosesdots

    Author: Draigon
    ASL Info:    25/m/Al
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 164/196/91
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1037
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsDeath of a Thousand Rosesdots

    As spring rains down
    upon mother earth
    roses bloom
    immiting the splendor of love,
    Thorns resembles pain,
    the nectar a sweet sensation
    quinching the thirst of lonliness
    Hurt washes away
    as the rose is watered,
    Yet like anything good in the world
    it fades into the distance
    with winter's fourthcoming,
    A rose dies
    as surely as love,
    The pain is imminent
    it is immortal as is death
    One thing is for certain
    spring will yet come again....

    Submitted on 2007-09-13 20:13:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow... reading Keiran's comment makes me wonder if s/he follows your work. Usually impecable (sp?), this one had a few glitches; but to be so harsh? Anyways, I cannot help what others write.

    Love the imagry of a rose blooming as love does. Yes, there's good and there's bad. I would have liked to see winter relate to the moments that aren't so easy rather than death, but I didn't write it, so who am I to critisise? Lovely once more....
    | Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, my
    this is beautifully written, quite lovely i think...a few spelling errors, but nothing major
    i am hoping you are well, and happy
    and that this isnt how you truly feel
    all sad and love fading away
    thats just not good

    but this piece is absolutely wonderful
    so glad to see you writing again

    | Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      I comment only to ask you to either get someone to proof read your work, or at least run it through a proper spell check. I know I, and many others lose all respect for a piece even before we finish it, if the spelling and grammar is bad.

    Now this isn't as bad as some I've seen, but all it would take is asking someone else to give it a once over. I wouldn't mind doing it even. Seriously, if your presentation isn't adequate, most people won't even think about what's inside.
    | Posted on 2007-09-13 00:00:00 | by Keiran | [ Reply to This ]

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