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    dots Submission Name: IDEASdots

    Author: emoxday
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 113/123/144
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       Yay, ideas to make lyrics. coolios.

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    Set me free
    From these bonds that tie me to this desolate hell.

    Walking around tieing words together.
    Guessing their meanings.
    Like a magic spell; I create.

    Filled with confusion.
    You'll never comprehend;
    I'm a shadow, you're the soul.
    My distance is far, but also close.

    The ocean is big
    but not as big as my mind
    that roams this world
    with feeble force
    waiting to find the next best thing

    I'm the consumer
    you are the product
    Why am I buying you
    because the media told me to.

    I'm in love with a spirit
    yet whenever I search, he always disapears;
    love's an illusion.
    Which fooled me to many times

    This feeling for you
    in which I have
    is changing me deeply
    I've become a new man.

    I feel so alone
    but I'm not
    sadness is by my side

    the rain comes with nimble force
    A storms come with limber force
    and yet nothing has shook me

    the stars twinkle like broken glass
    the moon smiles with a bitterness
    And all I can do is sing

    I sing for the emptiness
    from within
    the craving the want
    to please only him

    Submitted on 2007-09-13 23:41:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That i would say is a pretty good poem
    The first couple stanzas were very strong
    but towards the end they weren't tht strong.
    try to fix them up and not swtich to ngiht like that.
    but other than that it was really good!
    nice work
    (check out some of my worka nd telle me how it is !)
    | Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by tiffaroox3 | [ Reply to This ]

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