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    dots Submission Name: So Manydots
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    Author: boo boo
    ASL Info:    18/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 108/104/60
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSo Manydots
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    @@c-So many tears I have cried
    While inside that fragile flower tragically dies.

    So many horrors I have lived through
    While hiding my feelings for someone such as you.

    So many hurts I have felt during my life
    While on the outside I am grasping my pain like a knife.

    So many thoughts I have had for you
    While inside I hide afraid of the things you’ll do.@@




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       how lovley and teh feeling came across well you have a future in writing but i would love to see you tackle some new issue try just writing about a random thought a flower a rock egg salad anything it is a great way to hone your skill it is hard tobeleive so much talant is possesed by someone so young i will read all i can of your work you amaze me
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...this piece is very touching. I can feel the emotions coming from your soul just by reading the very first line:

    'So many tears I have cried
    While inside that fragile flower tragically dies.'

    Poetry is an awesome tool to use to put forth what you feel inside on the table without being straightforward and saying 'I'm angry. I'm depressed.' And I think you have used it well.

    Very beautiful write. Keep up the good work. =]

    ~Steph.
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by xXCptn_SephyXx | [ Reply to This ]


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