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Submission Name: Perfect dots

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Author:	fallen_angel384
ASL Info:	17/Female/uk
Elite Ratio:	3.26 - 59/87/22
Words:	103

Class/Type:	Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
Total Views:	350
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I wrote this a while ago Before i went into hospital id just broke up with my long term bf who i thought would be there for ever bt wasnt so i was feeling pretty low please comment or pm me and let me know what you think thankyouu

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Perfect

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Thoughts of suicide race through my head,
It would be so much easier if I were dead,
I'm tired of faking a laugh, a smile,
always living in fear, pain and denial.

I take up my blade, slide it slowly under my skin,
I'm fighting a losing battle, I know I cannot win.

What to people see when they look at my face?
a girl who's in trouble too deep?
or just another tradgic case..?

I'll soon be happy even though I lost the fight,
on the wall with my crimson sorrows i write:
'I'm Sorry I can't be perfect..'

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  you must understand first....this is a very well written poem..and that is something to look at..not many people can write you know...and as for the whole suicide thing...every person on this planet wants to die at some point in their life..i almost died....it's not worth it...you are depressed....you don't want to die..trust me when i say thing you don't want to die..you only want the pain to end.....hurting yourself doesn't make that go away....cutting yourself releases endorphens and makes you feel better it's true...i know i have the scars to prove it...but in the end that's all you have left..and ugly scars you have to see everyday of your life...and after ahile you'll be ashamed of it...excercising does the same thing you know..just try it..if you get sad go for a jog or a walk..it releases those endorphens and it givse you time to think... you want someone to love you only because you don't love yourself...take time to realize you are okay with being yourself..because in the end in real life..in REAL life...that's all you have is yourself..you are alone when you die...you can only trust yourself because you know yourself the best...and only you can control you...think of if you just take the time to realize that...think about it
| Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by taintedsmiles | [ Reply to This ]
  Noone is Perfect
If you learn any lesson in life that to me is one of the most important
I too was in these shoes many times
Where the thought of suicide was the only thing that absorbed my mind
It wasnt until I realized you have to Live life for yourself that things started to get better
Also remember you cant Love another until you first learn to Love yourself
I dont know if you have any religious beliefs but TRUST ME ON THIS
A belief system is very very important in the healing process from depression
You are still so young
I Promise you your Soulmate will come to you eventually
Dont rush your youth
You only have one and once its gone believe me its gone
Great Job!!
If you ever need someone to talk to Please just PM me I promise I will answer you back
I have also been told my writes are very uplifting perhaps they can help you feel a little better
I will be Praying for you
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, yeah as Judy said, life is not as we always want, and many people do not mind about other's feeling, so that would make you learn that we do not have to depend much in someone. We have to take care of our feelings.
I hope you can be better, thanks for shairng and if you have time please take a look to my writing, i would really appreciate it if you leave a comment, take care and have a nice day
peace and love
Victor
| Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
  It's true, people aren't meant to be perfect but that certainly doesn't stop us from strivng toward that point. I think this piece is beautiful in a disturbing way, and I commend you on a job well done. I hope that things get better for you, and just think of this pain as a learning experience. Don't let it get you down because all people deserve to be happy. God bless!
| Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]
  izzi! izzi! izzi!

news flash!
human beings are NOT meant to be perfect. if we were all perfect then how will anything work at all? i mean, we'd all have the perfect life and the perfect job and the perfect earth and pretty soon the earth will shut down because everyone would be annihilated on account of perfect boredom. there is a small exception though to perfection. life is - as one of my favourite show hosts – neil beuchanan – would say – "perfectly imperfect".

i hope the slicing yourself stuff is just a metaphor and you're really contemplating it... believe me – no boy (or girl for that matter) is worth slicing yourself over. much as i love van gogh's art, i think he was perfectly idiotic to cut of his ear. (dashedly silly). if you need pain, please volunteer as a nurse in a third world country or even at a soup shelter. gives you perspective. even easier is to read george orwell's - down and out in paris and london or khalid husseini's – the kite runner or my personal favourite – the hitchhiker's guide to the galaxy. makes you will realise how useless everything and how it makes little sense not to get bogged down by thinking too much.

gosh. i give pretty good advice. i think i'll use some of it.
| Posted on 2007-09-14 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]

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