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    dots Submission Name: My Louise (Aiden)dots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMy Louise (Aiden)dots
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    My Louse,
    Is dripping full of tears,
    Tripping over fears,
    Sitting Homeless,
    Smitten over years,
    They told her walls would cave in,
    Now we're all,
    Enslavened,
    Waiting hoping praying,
    Comback to us Aiden,
    A peace we once knew,
    A piece so once true,
    Three acts of wrong,
    Pierced it once through,
    They quote it everyday,
    At least once or two,
    "'So pray then this way',
    Well atleast we want to",
    But sometimes our dream's
    Are the cause of the hurt,
    Because our better seems,
    To only make it worse
    We tell too many lines,
    And write too a many a verse,
    But still my sweet louise,
    Lies in a herse...




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    ||| Comments |||
      wow, powerful.
    the end is my favorite...
    it reminds me of a poem i wrote ages ago,
    isnt it nice to be on the outside and observant of whats going on on the inside?


    ~Carrie

    P.S. amny=many
    | Posted on 2007-12-03 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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