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    dots Submission Name: Destiny Travelsdots
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    Author: EmpathicAya
    ASL Info:    13+6/unMale/Your Mind
    Elite Ratio:    7.66 - 665/396/86
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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    I turned in my sleep, as the moon breathed a halo of light around my body. The curtains gracefully gave way to the wind, who wanted to whisper in my ear. I breathed in love, and I breathed in destiny, for I was to travel tonight.

    The moon framed my body and soul, and then whispered invite. "Come, Oh Sweet One. Come to where love awaits you." The curtains fluttered with the joy I felt, which whooshed from my physical self. I felt, rather than saw, my Lady smile.

    My body had opened in a welcome, and I wasn't a medium anymore. Tonight, I was myself glowing. I was my Divinity. I have never felt at one with the Universe before, and I had never heard the call of love before.

    "Here is where you should be. Here is where you should call if you ever need me. Here is where I am for you."

    I still don't know how I ended up in your room.




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      Interesting poem."...Breathed in destiny for I was to travel tonight." I wondered where, since the speaker seemed to be in bed, not ready to go out anywhere.
    Was this in part a mediumistic trance? Had bit been before
    The moon is prominent with all the symbolic/archetypal imagery.If the sun was out it would be completely different.
    You have seemed to have connected with the universe in a very special way. May you have more encounters of this nature, if you desire.
    Possibly your inner life was more important than the external, so where you were was physically supportive not incidental as in essential(if I said that right?)
    Interesting.
    | Posted on 2008-01-26 00:00:00 | by azurwarrior | [ Reply to This ]
      I still don't know how you ended up in his room unless you were there all the time or you actually sleep walked to his room or maybe it was the dream of destiny. Wish it was that easy to end up in my loved one bed room. When my b/f spent the holiday with my parents, it was very hard to end up in his room nighttime. There was always that feeling that they'd wake up and notice me missing from my bed. Then they'd automatically know where i would be.

    I like the way you have worked on this piece though. There is a progression towards the ending. Very nicely done. I've read this easily from the beginning to the ending. Very enjoyable piece.

    Cheers,

    Irina
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]


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