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    dots Submission Name: morning drivedots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 518
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    dotsmorning drivedots
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    I let my head fall gently on the steering wheel the remnants of last night still sticky on my legs pressed against my skirt , cars go by and I know ill be here forever , the corner of my eyes finds the rearview and the details of the driver behind me come over me like a wave his eyes are brown I know without knowing his hands a hard ,my hips move slightly at the thought of them .like a dream I am his for now. the hood of my car is hot, burning my thighs a feminine pink, I can smell the sex baking ,his sweat burns my eyes I don't need his name just his forceful stare. I cant remember were my cloths went . I grasp a handful of dark hair and devour his neck he reeks of man no cologne just leather ,salt .I take him in like the ocean welcoming the storm . My head arches to the blinding sky don't move stay I want only for you to fill me a scream parts my dry lips .BEEP BEEP. Reality and a stop sign jerk me from his fire I hit the gas with one last look in the mirror . His arms are in the air and I am sure whatever he is mouthing is profane .. Oh well he drives a bmw anyway not my style I wish I wasn't outta cigarettes though ..




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      Oh, my, that was quite a drive! I just hope he's not one of those road rage guys that come after you with a vengence. Great fantasy, for certain! The story would be easier to read with sentencing, but I enjoyed it even without. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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