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    dots Submission Name: lastdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I drove down the old dirt road
    Remembered that first night
    You said it was all you’d dreamed.
    I conjured up that vision
    Your arms heavy around me.
    I could sleep like that then
    Now it suffocates me
    In the midst of my memory something went wrong.
    Flashes of metal, the echo of the machine.
    The sun like always is blinding.
    I hear your voice thunder over the noise.
    And then his response .
    You step from the control panel
    To look to his direction
    It happens
    High above
    A snapping
    The sound is like an egg breaking
    Magnified though .
    He runs to you calm but trembling
    Phone in hand he dials 3 numbers
    It fades after that
    I realize the car has stopped
    I punch the gas aware of lights on in the trailer
    Heads tilted eyes peering through its windows .
    I squeal to a stop in our drive way .
    Heart pounding, hands sweaty.
    I tremble from somewhere inside
    My core shaken
    I want to run to you
    Have you make it stop
    Make the seen unseen.
    I know what you’d say though
    Another rampant illusion
    A product of witches blood
    And overreaction
    You’d hold me
    Then kiss my forehead on your way out .
    I wont be sleeping for sometime.
    What a gift
    What a curse
    Steals the time
    Makes the love hurt

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      A sad story with some poetical words and symbols, you can improve it, but it was ok for me, and i could get what you were trying to tell, so thanks for sharing and i am willing to read more of your own, and if you have time please take a look to my writings i would really appreciate it if you leave comments.
    have a nice day and peace and love
    take care and keep writing
    | Posted on 2007-09-16 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]

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