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    dots Submission Name: mad mandots
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    Author: tobias-stone
    ASL Info:    19/Male/Kingston,ON
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1/0/4
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       a poem i wrote a while ago feed back if you wish


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    dotsmad mandots
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    The Mad Man

    so here i sit with the thoughts of a mad man in my skull

    with no way to express him to the world

    he wants to be released but no one can calm him

    he hungers for sweet release to the world of the living

    but to no avail can he sway mine mind to his warped view



    if the one who could calm him be present upon his release

    he would surely go stark mad to eternity and beyond

    never to return to the surface of his prison

    but atlas none doth exist anymore for they have rejected him

    so with that in mind i deny him again his appeal to me



    upon me seeing the glimmer of hope in her eyes

    do i let my guard down does he make his move against my sanity

    but with her denying my existance doth his attempt at freedom fail

    and my soul go with him to the depths of the prison that is my mind

    so there we sit him and i behind the prison that is me



    both eger to esscape and only room for one to live

    he knows i could wrest the win from him

    but i'm afraid if he even gets close to control

    none but him and i know the damage that he could inflict

    so here we sit, he plotting destruction, i asking for forgivness at creating this monster




    Submitted on 2007-09-15 23:43:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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