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    dots Submission Name: falling off the razordots

    Author: Darc Angel
    ASL Info:    18/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 10/5/56
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsfalling off the razordots

    here i lie at the razors edge
    the day i made my final pledge
    the day i opened up my skin
    the day i let out all my sins

    here i lie at the razors edge
    so close to falling off that ledge
    this pain and blood in which i dredge
    caused me to make that final pledge

    falling into this dark abyss
    awaiting the blades final kiss
    looking back on that first slice
    the day my heart turned cold as ice

    i think back on that first slash
    staring away at the gash
    lying here at the razorz edge
    so close to falling off the ledge

    i close my eyes
    to escape these lies
    i chose this knife
    to end my strife

    i cut this vain
    to end this pain
    i sit here sighing
    my hope dying

    lying here at the razors edge
    so close to falling off the ledge
    just one more shove and ill be gone
    this is my final pledge...

    Submitted on 2007-09-16 05:03:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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