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Submission Name:
falling off the razor
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Author:
Darc Angel
ASL Info:
18/m/ny
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3.95 - 10/5/56
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170
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Misc/Misc
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falling off the razor
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here i lie at the razors edge
the day i made my final pledge
the day i opened up my skin
the day i let out all my sins
here i lie at the razors edge
so close to falling off that ledge
this pain and blood in which i dredge
caused me to make that final pledge
falling into this dark abyss
awaiting the blades final kiss
looking back on that first slice
the day my heart turned cold as ice
i think back on that first slash
staring away at the gash
lying here at the razorz edge
so close to falling off the ledge
i close my eyes
to escape these lies
i chose this knife
to end my strife
i cut this vain
to end this pain
i sit here sighing
my hope dying
lying here at the razors edge
so close to falling off the ledge
just one more shove and ill be gone
this is my final pledge...
Submitted on 2007-09-16 05:03:06
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