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    dots Submission Name: i left youdots
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    Author: Darc Angel
    ASL Info:    18/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 10/5/56
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    From this coffin that i lie,
    you can still see it in my eyes,
    The emptiness left inside,
    that consumed me as i died.

    The image you can't erase,
    the look upon you'r face,
    As i struggled on the rope,
    clawing at my throat.

    Blood pouring from my eyes,
    you're the image that i despise,
    Don't touch me let me hang,
    there's nothing left to change.

    The darkness is closing in,
    finally i meet the end,
    Death and i go hand in hand,
    you see now we're the best of friends.

    I tried to tell you make you see,
    all the pain and hell you caused in me,
    I'm a toy left on the shelf,
    you brought this upon yourself.

    Don't try to shift the blame,
    they all saw on my wrists the carvings of your name,
    I have given death all i've got,
    just remember this is all your fault.

    No more tears i have to cry,
    because this time...i left you behind.




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